Danner: The Art of the Rewrite: Institute of International Studies, UC Berkeley

The Art of the Rewrite. Mark Danner Practicum: Perfecting the Craft

How does a writer move from rough draft to final product? On these pages, writer, editor, and MacArthur Fellow Mark Danner edits his video interview with Harry Kreisler (March 1999). Danner's responses have been divided into two columns: on the left is the original transcription; on the right, his perfected version of the text. See also the transcribed text of the interview, with video links: Being a Writer.

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Writing as Reportage

Your writing is characterized by a rich historical sense. You are also a man who goes to the scene, who writes and clarifies our understanding of what's going on. In the case of your articles on Haiti, you found yourself in some very dangerous situations. Tell us about the writer as observer, how it plays itself out and how it conflicts with a historian looking back. Do those two Mark Danner identities conflict with each other, or do they mesh nicely?

I have never felt a conflict. There is an odd thing about going to Haiti or Bosnia or El Salvador. You are given a privileged position. Haiti is even more pronounced because you are white, and you stand out. You are given a privileged position. You are the observer, the watcher. You have a notebook. You stand there. Others have cameras. There are certain apparatus that mark them out as separate. And it's a remarkable thing, because you will be in the middle of scenes of violence. Certainly in Haiti I was in several, and in Bosnia, too, where for some reason there is this space of peace that you are allowed to occupy, and of course there is no particular reason why that cannot be breached at any moment. It's almost as if in the cartoon, when Wile E. Coyote runs off the cliff off into the air: until he looks down, he doesn't fall.

I have never felt a conflict. When a reporter goes to cover Haiti or Bosnia or El Salvador, he is given a privileged position. In Haiti it is even more pronounced because I am white, and I stand out. You are given a privileged position. You are the observer, the watcher. You have a notebook. You stand there. Others have cameras. There are certain apparatus that mark you out as separate. And it's a remarkable thing, because you will find yourself in the middle of scenes of violence -- certainly in Haiti I was in several, and in Bosnia, too -- where for some reason this space of peace is created that you are allowed to occupy, and of course there is no particular reason why that space cannot be breached at any moment. It reminds me a bit of that cartoon, Road Runner, when Wile E. Coyote runs off the cliff straight into the air: until he looks down, he doesn't fall.

I remember very much an incident in Haiti during the so-called aborted election in 1987. A very sunny day, a Sunday, all these people came out to vote, and the Tonton Macoutes of Duvalier attacked several polling places, shot at us as well. They killed a great number of people very savagely with machetes and automatic weapons in broad daylight, and people went back in their houses. There is something very striking about a very huge capital utterly empty on a perfectly sunny day, like a de Chirico painting. But one of the things they did was, after a particularly bloody incident at a polling place where they killed nineteen people, some journalists showed up immediately afterward. I was not among them. They were standing around and taking pictures, taking notes and so on -- all these bodies -- and suddenly the Macoutes came back and shot three journalists point blank. This was like the coyote looking down. Suddenly there was nothing holding any of us up.

I remember an incident in Haiti during the so-called aborted election in November, 1987. A bright sunny day, a Sunday, all these people, Haitians in their Sunday best, coming out to vote. And the Tonton Macoutes, the militia, of Duvalier attacked people at several polling places, shot at us as well. The Macoutes killed a great number of people very savagely with machetes and automatic weapons in broad daylight. People fled back in their houses, and I'll never forget the scene: a huge capital utterly empty on a perfectly sunny day, like a de Chirico painting. After a particularly bloody incident at a polling place where the Macoutes killed nineteen people, some journalists showed up immediately afterward. They were taking notes, taking pictures, and so on -- all these bodies -- and suddenly the Macoutes came back and shot three journalists point blank. Now this was like Wile E. Coyote looking down. Suddenly there was nothing holding any of us up.

Everyone went into the hotel, and at a particular point someone drove by, at least this is what people said, drove by the front of the hotel and waved a gun. There was a stampede in the hotel lobby, and there were probably five hundred journalists there for this election. People smashed through the back wall of the hotel, which was entirely glass, destroyed almost entirely the hotel lobby in their keenness to get away. These were foreign correspondents who spent their lives covering situations like this. Yet removing this protective shell was a terrifying thing.

Everyone filed back into the hotel, and at a particular point someone drove by the front of the hotel and waved a gun. Hundreds of journalists stampeded through the hotel lobby, smashed through the back wall of the hotel, which was mostly glass, destroying almost entirely the lobby in their keenness to get away. Now, these were foreign correspondents who spent their lives covering situations like this. Yet removing this protective shell terrified them.

Now your original question was whether the historical and the observer-on-the-scene personae are somehow separated. I don't think so, because I think the person gathering information and trying to see what is different, trying to detail -- it's the eye trying to detail what this place looks like and how it's interesting, how it is puzzling, and how one can get to the end and tell what happened -- which is really the point in the end. To tell what happened. The historical part has to do with that, because in the end you are trying to tell how it happened, but why, to help it make sense.

Now you asked whether the historical and the observer-on-the-scene personae are somehow separate. I don't think so: the person gathering information and trying to see what is different, the eye trying to detail what this place looks like and how it's interesting, how it is puzzling, how one can get to the end and tell what happened, all are really working in service of the same goal: To tell what happened. The historical part has to do with that task, of course, because in the end you are trying to tell not only how it happened, but why -- to help it make sense.

This idea of killing people, in El Salvador, killing 126 children. You are not doing your job unless you make some effort to have people understand how someone can do that, because it isn't acceptable to simply say "These are evil people. Evil people swept down and killed these people." You haven't gone far enough, and in fact, in Salvador, I eventually did find people who told me about reactions within this particular outfit, the Alcada Battalion in the army, and how they had complained about it [the massacre] and how they had resisted it. They were human beings. They did it eventually, but afterwards there were grumblings about it, and so the officers had to yell at the soldiers.

In El Mozote, El Salvador, for example: the idea of killing more than 700 people, including 126 children. You are not doing your job unless you make some effort to help people understand how someone can do that. I don't think it's acceptable simply to say "These are evil people. Evil people swept down and killed these children." You haven't gone far enough, and in fact, in Salvador, I eventually did find people who told me about reactions within this particular outfit, the Atlacatl Battalion, and how they had complained about the massacre, how they had resisted killing the kids. They did it eventually, but afterwards there were grumblings and complaints, and the officers had to yell at the soldiers. They were human beings, not demons.

In any event, one of your tasks is to first of all tell what happened, to do so in a way that is understandable.

In any event, it does seem to me that the main task is to tell what happened, and to do so in a way that is comprehensible.

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